Help with Statement round 2
So here it is again, with revisions from Dad, Tom and April and additions from me. HALP?


Statement of Interest: A formal statement indicating why the applicant is interested in pursuing an MBA (i.e., career enhancement, improve knowledge in a certain area, etc.). There are no length requirements.

The world is a big place, but every year, we get closer to our neighbors through business relations. I lived in China this past year teaching English, and I saw how big a role diversity plays in the business world. I witnessed first hand the importance of overcoming cultural differences to achieve a common goal. I want to become a part of this process of globalization.

This past year, I taught English to primary and middle school students in China. Owing to severe over-crowding in the classrooms and relative poverty, it was extremely difficult and the rewards were hard gained. Even the teachers at this particular school in Shenzhen who are fluent in Chinese and teach English told me that teaching at Qianhai School is tough, but the challenge of teaching here has taught me the value of perseverance. It has also helped me to find out that while I enjoyed teaching, it is not a career that I feel I can excel at. Experience I have gained from teaching such as planning out my lessons, developing creative ways of presenting material, working as part of a team, and measuring the results of my work are all something that I not only feel comfortable with, but are skills I want to develop further. Because of this, I think I will be well suited to business planning and management, but I would benefit greatly from formal training. That is why I am exploring earning an MBA.

My East Asian Studies degree does not offer many opportunities for employment on its own; however, combined with a Masters in Business Administration from the University of Colorado, my education will give me a competitive edge and make me a valuable asset to any future employers wanting to do business in China. My undergraduate degree has given me a respect of foreign cultures, especially Chinese culture. China is an economic titan, and being able to do business with China will allow a business to reap great rewards. With a Masters of Business Administration, Chinese language skills, and an understanding of Chinese culture, I want to help American companies take advantage of China’s development.

In high school, I excelled at mathematics, so I attempted university level calculus. I did not achieve as high a level of comprehension in calculus as I would have liked, but that allowed me to reevaluate my goals for college. Now, I can say that my skills in mathematics were good while in use, so I will quickly regain my aptitude during business classes.

I want to obtain my Masters of Business Administration from the University of Colorado. The University upholds a standard of quality that is very important to me when choosing a degree program. Reading the Student Vignettes excites me for the opportunity to be tied to such wonderful people through our common goal of excellence. In the Faculty Vignettes, each one of the featured professors exudes an enthusiasm for teaching that I feel will propel me to my highest achievement. I can see in the Alumni Vignettes that graduates of the program have great opportunities in the business world. I hope to one day be a part of that alumni and that business community.